Even without seeing your first draft, I can give you these notes for your rewrite:
1 – Put at least one solid laugh on every page. Not witty banter or zany behavior. A laugh. Not just your opinion, but based on other people’s reads. You are having other people read it, right?
2 – Double-check your story structure and make your act breaks strong to keep an audience interested (and surprised) to the very end.
3 – Make sure every scene has a a comedic high point (character-based) and a dramatic high-point (story beat) that advances the plot, hopefully in a funny turn.
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